Thanks for the tips. I thought I might be writing him wrong, but then again, we would have to apply game logic to a soldier. There was a reason I added the plasma burn. Also, I made Rookie rough in order for the game logic to work. In the game Rookie is a silent protagonist, present through subtle development. But when you write a story with character like that, you need to give a reason why he's silent. In this, Rookie is a character who's jaded by his own actions and is cold as hell. Think Chief except with PTSD. Rookie isn't just rough, he is messed up, in many different ways. Vergil is shown to have emotion in the actual game, insulting Brutes near the end of the game, and protect Sadie. Rookie has never shown that. That's the contrast you will see, trust me. And I have few twists in store. When this over, there will be some major differences.