Not a bad start, but it's a bit... Generic? Don't take that the wrong way. It's just that every other novel that comes out these days is a dystopian story. Not saying it wouldn't be good, because the base doesn't sound bad. Just a bit too familiar-sounding at the moment.
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That's what I'm thinking. It seems like a 1984/V For Vendetta/Fahrenheit 451/A Handmaids Tale ripoff.