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#Idea

Edited by Sylok's Defiler: 8/21/2015 10:26:14 PM
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A Novel Idea (Writing RD and Critique Thread)

Welcome to the aptly-named Writer's lounge [i]A Novel Idea[/i]. Here, would-be authors, part-time writers, and anyone with a creative mind can share their Rough Drafts of writing and fan fiction. Complimentary links will be created if and when they need to be, but just post whatever you come up with, and let other people voice their opinions on your work. Criticism is always welcome, so long as it isn't straight up slander. Enjoy! IMPORTANT EDIT: for shits and giggles, if you ever feel like writing a story with multiple chapters or long blogs of fanfiction, incorporate this thread in your work as an Easter egg in some way, shape, or form. Example: "why don't we take Bakini Bottom and push it somewhere else?" "Hey, now there's a novel idea." OR "This guy I talked to, he's, uh... He's part of a PMC my organization works with. I forget his name and he's obsessed with old rock and blackjack, but he's one hell of an asset."

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  • Edited by AgentMizzmo: 9/20/2015 6:39:52 AM
    [b]Empty[/b] The mass of people gathered in the area, totaling 78. We were all here for the same somber occasion. Someone had passed, then someone else had. I remained there, sitting still. My face set in an emotionless expression. "He was so young... It's a tragedy." People always said those things. But they weren't there when it happened. They don't understand. They didn't walk in as he- As he shot himself in the head. Only I was there. .357 Magnum revolver, 23 years old. Double Action, wooden handle. I couldn't stand it. I wasn't angry, sad, depressed. I looked up and saw that the priest wanted me talk. I walked up. "James was a great kid. He was my friend. I- I still remember the day I met him in Pre-K. We, uhh, well, we sat there talking about Transformers: Cybertron, this show we'd discovered. We were young, but we realized how important our friendship was. We always helped each other out. When he got beat over the head with a bike lock, I was at the hospital with him most of my after-school hours. When I got slashed with that knife, he did the same. We watched each other's backs. Then his Dad died. He changed. He became detached, but we were more than friends, we were-" I begin to choke up. I only manage to say one last statement. "We were family." I step down and walk back next to my mother, and they lower the casket into the ground. I didn't cry. I just sat there. Feeling nothing. Just.... Empty. Empty. [i]Our hearts still ache with sadness And secret tears still flow What it meant to lose you No one can ever know[/i]

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