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originally posted in:The Black Garden
Edited by zekouse: 8/8/2014 3:49:51 AM
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Hunted

This is my second story (first short one). A lot less of my "additions" than my first. Enjoy.

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  • Edited by Jyoohan: 8/8/2014 2:19:31 AM
    Obscure to say the least, needs more clarity. I couldn't tell if it was a Guardian fighting Fallen or Fallen fighting Fallen. A little more detail to the story's context would be great help as to not confuse the readers. While you edit your work, you must assume the role of a reader who has no knowledge of what's going on. I hope that helps.

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