Could you help me do some revisions? There's an excerpt below if you guys want to have a go. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks!
[quote]“Oh my f0cking god damn shit baby Jesus I love cheese f0cking sandwiches.” Lucifer said as he watched a football player shove a pencil up his ass. The announcer for the F0cking Asshole Gay network moaned the voiceover, screaming about f0cking rabid geese with a stick and putting his nose in a shemale’s penis hole. The sack of babyshit pressed itself against the remote, smeared greasy crap onto the buttons until the channel changed. A giant dick filled the screen, and then there was a toothless crackwhore yammering about how loose her stinky pussy was and how much like a honkey’s asscrack it smelled. The sack of babyshit changed the channel again and Lucifer threw his sandwich at the T.V.[/quote]
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I am also writing a book. It is about a Gunslinger who is searching for a dark tower.
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I demand more.... this was.... amazing!
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10/10 would buy multiple copies just to have them sitting on my bookshelf
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Looks to be a New York Times Bestseller
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Needs more necrophilia.
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Holy shit this is hot
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No help? :(