I got bored and decided to write a poem about a disturbed phantom artist who hunts and murders people at night, then uses their blood and corpse as part of his artwork. I'm stuck on title at the moment, so I was wondering if any of you would have an idea, or at least have suggestions to inspire my own. Any input is appreciated. Thank you. :)
Here is the poem, for anyone who cares to read it. It's slightly lengthy, and I won't say it's great. Its quality is yours to decide....now I just copy and pasted from a microsoft word document, so hopefully it comes through right.
A starry night sets the scene,
The moon is full with a silver gleam.
The rays dance upon the world
As if the fairies of a dream.
Bouncing off the walls, the ground,
And everything else in sight;
The city became a broken mirror
For the glimmering stream of light.
Then, you see, it hit upon the ground
The crimson pool of mortal blood.
T’was spilled upon the filthy stone,
The filthy cobblestone and mud.
Another murder made that night,
Another life cut out and whisked away.
Another soul into the darkness of night,
Never again to see the light of day.
And still, while none were near,
The killer loomed above his prey,
And pondered over the innocent life
That was taken by his blade.
Not for long, his look forlorn,
It changed and twisted all too quick.
From deep in thought, to howling laughter;
T’was clear that this man was sick.
His mind was vile, but still so sound,
He wasn’t mad in the slightest bit.
He was disturbed, but just an artist,
And so his inspiration had hit.
He drew his image from the blood,
From the shining pool of red.
He crafted his pieces from them,
From the corpses of the dead.
And he disappeared into the shadows,
As silent as a phantom in the dark,
Yet again evading his capture,
But still reviving his inner spark.
And somewhere in the darkness,
Where every evil creeps,
He continues to craft his artwork,
Until a new victim he seeks.
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i love your poem
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I would like to see the art he makes. I like it.
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[spoiler]Yeah, I didn't read it. [/spoiler]
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Not bad. Not bad at all.
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Nice.
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I like it. Good job.
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7.5/10
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would be nice to see separate stanzas - to break it up a bit - but i like it yeah.
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You need a better list of vocabulary that captures the imagery better.
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I was expecting something a little more gruesome. And maybe too much about the moonlight? After that, it flows a little nicer.
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Disturbed Phantom Artist Who Hunts And Murders People At Night
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"im gay and i have a fetish for penises"
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What did you decide?
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Night of the Hunter <.< >.>
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Poop Balls: A Love Story
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Reaping Inspiration Breathlessly Beautiful Death by Artist Morbidity on Display
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Well, guys, I'll be turning in for the night, but i'm loving the suggestions, and like I said, I appreciate all of the ideas. And I offer my thanks in advance to any others who'll be responding once i've drifted off to sleep. Goodnight, everyone. Have a beautiful nightmare. :)
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Invasion of the flat booty bitches
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Rembrandt's Repast
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Blood of art.
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A Ghastly Palette.
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I AMS EEING FDOUBKLE VIWESIOPON RIGHT NOW
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Blood art Corpse creation body art sick pleasure A different outlet
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"The One Who Paints with Death"?
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I really don't mean to be offensive, but if you want to write about things like this, you're probably on somebody's watch list.