Sir-Brilliant, I was just wondering if you have come up with a title for your book? I'm sure everyone on this forum would be happy to submit some suggestions for a title if you have trouble thinking of one. Just something to think about. [Edited on 1/1/2005 7:17:44 PM]

I hate all fanfic. This is no exception. Its good quality, but I have my own ideas about what happens.

wow, crap, so many responses. i thought that this would be dead until i put up my next instalment, but look... anyways, i don't care if you don't like it, but if you think theirs room for improvement, your absolutely right. i know that im not the best writer in the world, nor have i claimed it. so chill. also, if something doesn't sound right, like a name or something that happens, just say it. but you should have a better thing to go in its place, because otherwise, i'll just think your crazy. anyways, the next installment is almost done. i've been working on it for a while, but with christmas and new years, ... lets just say i've been put off a bit. i should have it up by sunday or monday, but nothings for certain.

no rush - take your time, after all its your book not ours. incidentally, ive been trying to think of a name for the new covenant, nothing yet unfortunately, but ill let you know if anything occurs to me

For all u morons who are complaining that the storyline doesnt fit in, have another can and go play tetris. MC is on a forerunner ship (possibly the ark) at the end of halo 2 right near earth bcoz he talks to the admiral. The other spartans could b on earth for all u guys know bcoz they r not mentioned in halo 2. Kelly IS with Dr Halsey on that ship heading in some unknown direction thru slipspace. This fanfic fits perfectly with the books and game and anyone who thinks otherwise should really reread this fanfic or better yet, the novels. Gr8 work sir brilliant thats really good keep it up m8.

You have done a great job, the new name should be prefects or HALO,DUH!

1. fanfic is fine and his book is good but if it came out in a store i wouldn't read it. 2. i agree people who say RUSH! all i ahev to say is. sheesh i hope this isnt the only thing hats keeping you alive 3. about the new cov name i aheva suggestion. its been my name ona few games and my bros also. The Voxism. Usually my name is Vox but if you dont like The Vox as the name then The Voxism might be better 4. those whop said this fits the story line perfectly? *long long long long! whistle* it aint even CLOSE "as far as hes written" i know a guy who works for bungie *tecnically not like a main worker* and he wont tell me what happens :( BUT i know another guy "also nto a main worker and he told me what they ahve so far and man "stuff that i wotn say cause then all of you will know waht happens" 5. by the time halo 3 comes out this book wont even be close to done, proof reading, ideas etc. and when halo 3 comes out you will say aww such hard work for nothing and then everyone will forget you and nothing else will be heard of you. lol (not that dramatic) 6. i aitn saying his work is hard to read. im just saying that hes like trying to pose as .. well a poser i guess 7. i would post my version but since all of u officialy hate me you will prolly either love it without tellign me and say u really hate it. or MOST likely hate it and tell em you still hate it (heh) i always think my works suck books i wrote for english and crap i think always suck but nooo i had to freakign read them in front of an audience. man i was sittign there like dude this si so boring.. dude look at that i could have amde it betetr by doing this and this blah blah blah. yet everyone loves it. so i wont post it cause u guys hate me

Damn. That was great. i would read that , you should post the other pages mabey you could call tht new covenant the legendary order [Edited on 1/3/2005 5:47:31 AM]

man tis stuff is great, put more up soon

[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Tetramicrophia It would be awesome if the new fleet under the Arbiter would ally with the humans and kill the heretics.[/quote] yeah thats a good idea only the heretics where good all along and aribter switched over after you were pushed off a cliff by a brute The prophets where false. so they should actually be fighting against the covenant

Title: The Ark Simple, like "the Flood" And, those who agree the games DO make references to Noah's Ark, the Flood is a key part of the story, so maybe this book should be named after another key part of the story?

[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] The Møøse Title: The Ark Simple, like "the Flood" And, those who agree the games DO make references to Noah's Ark, the Flood is a key part of the story, so maybe this book should be named after another key part of the story?[/quote] i like that... good job

I just thoght you would like to know that in the Halo 1 hand book on page 5 last paragraph it says that the Pillor of Autom escaped with the last sparten 2. and the rest of them where left on reach, Rember reach is destroyed. So you mite consider the fact that all the other spartens are dead. But I guess it is possible that the other spartans escaped, but that would purpose that the spartans are numberd (Last Spartain 2) I find this in my opnion unlikely. I think your storys ok but I also hope Halo 3 focises more on the human perpective, even if some of the alens become our alies. But I think Bungie has a good enogh story with unexpexed twists for Halo 3. Note: Bungie has some things in the book that have changed or gone into different context is the better way to say it. The books gives what the game does not, and the game gives you what the book does not. There may be clues but bungie is not going to give you the story in the book. [Edited on 1/4/2005 3:21:48 PM]

yo cory u havnt read any of the books, all of what u said is wrong. Im guessing he is baseing his book off the first 3 so u will have to read them to understand.

the ark would be good except that's the name of the ship the mc's on. no good names for the book, but here's a few for the new covenant: -siphon -harmonists -crusades -province -negus -opisthagnathous -sycophancy -thrall check the definitions...most fit the theme [Edited on 1/4/2005 3:28:54 PM]

[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] EAGLES5 yo cory u havnt read any of the books, all of what u said is wrong. Im guessing he is baseing his book off the first 3 so u will have to read them to understand.[/quote] i was just going to say that

[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] dye the ark would be good except that's the name of the ship the mc's on. no good names for the book, but here's a few for the new covenant: -siphon -harmonists -crusades -province -negus -opisthagnathous -sycophancy -thrall check the definitions...most fit the theme[/quote] Actually, the theory that the Halo story references to Noah's Ark has to do with Earth being the Ark, not the ship. So I'm assuming you dissagree with that theory. [Edited on 1/4/2005 3:36:05 PM]

I am huge fan of fanfic and this one has a good story going back and forth between the arbitor and the mc and now dr.hasley and fread and linda. So I think you have a full-flege book going on here I think you soudl try to get the okay from bungie once you finish it and try to get it published because if uhhhhh... whatever his name is no going to write another book then publish it well wait for you to upload the next chapter because once you get the entier book up you never know maybe frankie or sketch will see it

Dude nice story like the other dude said see if you can write the books for Halo 2 if they arent already.

Hey everyone, here's chapter 2! but first, i want to mention a few things. to start off, it was never stated what the ark was, so we don't really know if its earth, or the ship mc is on, so stop arguing about it. i have my own ideas about it, which you will hopefully see soon enough, that show its not either. also, because someone mentioned the name "the ark", and nobody objected to it, and it does make sense, then the book shall be called that from this day forth. it is decreed. as for the name for the arbiter's "covenant", it may change, it may not, but i may just have a vote here on it, so collect any and all names that sound good for it, cause i'll put it up tomorrow. lastly, i found it hard to switch off characters(mc, then arbiter, then back) over and over for each chapter, so everything i wrote now, including this chapter, will be part of book 1, and we'll move on from there. also, i haven't been able to reach anyone at bungie, so if anyone knows how, that'd be great, cause i've tried. hell, if you can, just tell em to come here, and read this. and now, here's what everyone's been waiting for... Chapter 2 First Age of Rebirth/Yielding Righteousness/Preeminant Flagship The General of the armies walked into the temple, his steady pace making him appear to hover above the ground as well as a Todstilla Ordidor. His silver armor reflected the luminous purple lighting used in this holy sanctuary. Scanning the room, he spotted his target. The Arbiter. Walking over to the Arbiter immediately alerted all honor guards present in a 20 foot radius, yet they all turned away when they saw who came forth. Now beside the Arbiter, he fell on his knees, bowed, and whispered a short prayer. Straightening up, his eyes turned and locked onto the Arbiter, who sat in a meditative stance, both arms as though they held a ball and eyes closed. As he opened his mouth to speak, the ball was broken, and the General found one hand held up, indicating both silence and acknowledgement. Standing up, the Arbiter followed suit, slowly opening his eyes, then was led out of the temple, but in no hurry. The Arbiter turned back towards the temple, and gazed upon its magnificence. The peace he received during every meditation here astounded him, as though he belonged in this temple, and no other. Perhaps this ship, and no other. With that, he left his sanctuary, to continue his holy mission. His duty. “Your report, Drashaa.” “Yes, Arbiter. As you know, the fleet engaged the holy world three hours ago. Although our forces are still gathering, I have been able to assemble a small fleet, and can engage and arrive there in 15 minutes.” “And how many ships are there?” The General paused, which the Arbiter knew was a bad sign, because he would not be counting the number of available ships. But because they only had less than two hours before leaving the second ring and bringing together a group to begin with, his fleet could be considered a miracle. Yet would it be enough? “There are 20 ships, Arbiter.” The Arbiter turned and paced, deep in thought. The General looked down, as though he had failed his mission, only to be surprised by the Arbiter’s quick reply. “It will simply have to do. I want you to find you’re most trusted soldier and task him collecting all remaining forces. Now tell me, what of our guests?” “The Human’s remain unseen by all aboard, and can remain so indefinitely. However, communication with them has been severed.” “How so?” “I believe that the ring may have translated our language’s to us instantly, allowing our mutual understanding. Without it, we have no means to communicate.” “I see.” The Arbiter turned away once more, facing a large window that showed the blackness of space, only to be blocked by those ships ready to be sent, possibly to the slaughter. If all went well, many Covenant ships, with officers who knew nothing of the Prophet’s treachery, would learn of it, and attempt a takeover of that vessel. The number of acquired ships, however, was impossible to determine. “Order the fleet to engage.” The General bowed gently, then turned and headed for the door. As it opened, the Arbiter said, “Order it, personally.” Astonished and in shock, the General turned towards the Arbiter, with his thoughts showing on his face. “Arbiter, you wish me to lead the fleet?” The Arbiter faced his general, keeping a steady gaze. Kneeling to one knee, the General said, “Arbiter, I cannot take this honor away from you,” and bowed his head. The Arbiter walked over and placed his hand upon the broad shoulder. “I must, as more important matters await my immediate attention. Now rise, and do as I command, Drashaa.” Looking up, he rose and rushed to the door, knowing his mission could wait no longer. Just as the door opened, the General craned his head back. ‘But what of yourself, Arbiter? Can I not assist you in any way?” Smiling, the Arbiter shook his head. “My mission is to find this ‘ark’, before the Prophets do. They undoubtedly have the location of it, and once they complete their journey to the holy world, I fear that it will be their next destination. I must secure it before this can happen, and find whatever secrets it holds.” “I understand.” He turned and ran out the door, leaving the Arbiter alone once again. Looking out the window, thoughts rushed through his mind. One thing that had always eluded the Arbiter was fate. He understood that everything had a certain path they would lead for their lives, yet he always wondered whether what he was doing was his faith. Born into the warrior caste and becoming the general of the armies showed how formidable of an opponent he was to anyone and anything. But is this what is supposed to be? Only a few days before, he could never have imagined such a drastic turn of events, for both himself and the entire covenant. What was the cause of this? More questions ran through his mind, but he focused on one and tried to explain it. The parasite! That was where the first problems arose. The feeble humans stood no chance, even though some of their tactics and weapons were quite effective, it was only a matter of time before their complete extermination. But when the single human ship, the Pillar of Autumn, landed on the first ring, and the parasite attacked, problems arose. With the difficulty in destroying the parasite, and with the constant barrage from the humans and their demon, there was little chance he had at stopping the destruction of the ring. And even the second ring brought forth the same problems, except he led no one. Yet the addition of the Brutes to the covenant seemed minor, his failing at the first ring allowed them leeway no species has ever had in the covenant. It was then that their treachery became known, as well as the prophet’s deceitful act towards the Sangheili. No. This is where fate has brought me, and for good reason. If the parasite never appeared, then he would never have become the Arbiter. And the first ring would have been activated, destroying all of them. And even if the demon had stopped that from happening, it would undoubtedly have happened upon the second ring. Fate was not to blame for this heresy. The Prophets were. “Perhaps I may be of service?” The familiar voice startled the Arbiter, as his plasma rifle was aimed directly at the eye of 343 Guilty Spark. “Oracle!” Immediately harnessing his weapon and calming himself, he shook his head, confused at how its presence had been masked from him. “How did you enter this room?” “Why, there is an interesting system of passages that contain the gases your species uses to breathe, such as Oxygen, Nitrogen, Carbon Dio…” “Ahh, Oracle, you came through the air passageways. A clever way to circulate throughout the ship. However, to answer you’re question, I could use information.” “Splendid! How may I be of service?” This machine was interesting, having emotions, and floated through the air with no equipment seemingly being used. It almost seemed like another living being, other than its looks. “I would like to know about the humans.” “Humans? Oh, species classified number 001.” Species 001? “Yes, the reclaimers have quite an interesting history, having war after war, and always having so many…” “Wait, you claim them to be the first species you encountered, and you call them reclaimers. Surely, other species have come before us to the rings.” “Of course, and they were disposed of by the Flood.” “But if this is true, why are they the first species listed in your databank? Why are they the reclaimers?” “Because they were designated to be the only species allowed to commence the activation of any ring.” I am asking the wrong question! The Arbiter thought for a moment, and then stared directly into the large, blue eye. “Oracle, who created the rings?” [Edited on 1/4/2005 11:33:43 PM]

Great chapter keep up the good work

awesome.. i still think that the inquisition is a good name for the new covies...

that last installment was great and very suspensful ending :)

AH! Cliffhanger! Awesome job, keep it up. By the way, if you haven't already sir_brilliant, make this one of our favorites/bookmarks so it doesn't get buried in all the other threads that come up. [Edited on 1/5/2005 4:27:17 PM]

Nice i like were you are going with the story. Has any body contacted you about working for bungie and "offically" makeing the book. You got the talent i hope you dont piss Nylund off by taking his job.

Great job as usual sir brilliant. Keep up the god work.